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Hey i haven't been on for a while and haven't really made any more cards because a while ago i took all my cards and card stuff into school and someone nicked all of it which kinda made me give up on the whole card thing but now i'm back now designing earrings and hopefully cards tell me what you think
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How successful do you find Chapter 1 as the opening of the novel ‘Pride and Prejudice’?
Any author would want the opening chapter of their book to make a good impression on their readers and to encourage them to read on. The first line of a book must be additionally thought about very carefully. In this essay I will be studying the way Jane Austen opens ‘Pride and Prejudice’, the language that is used and the concept that it gives the reader.
The opening line of the book is one of the most famous in the world. ‘IT is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife’. It is well-known because it more or less sums up the whole essence of the book.
Jane Austen has been very clever with this first line. It shows immediately that the book is going to contain some humour as Austen is almost making fun of the tradition that was around at that time. The way she accentuates the phrase with the fact that it is ‘universally acknowledged’ (i.e. it is known all around the world) when really it isn’t adds humour also.
A lot of the humour contained in the first chapter is thanks to the introduction of the characters Mr and Mrs Bennet. Jane Austen introduces the characters with a lot of realism, the fact that they are just talking together in their home as they usually would gives the impression that the characters are very comfortable with the position that they are currently in. Mr Bennet is a very sharp character however his wife that Austen has created is very much the opposite. Mr Bennet’s sharpness adds to the humour dramatically and Austin uses wit to brighten up the first chapter. For example:
‘ “Do not you want to know who has taken it?” cried his wife impatiently,
“You want to tell me and I have no objection to hearing it!” ’
Austen has given Mr Bennet a very entertaining reply to his wife’s demand. Instead of just writing “yes”, she manages to make a whole joke out of the situation and makes Mr Bennet seem very open by speaking his mind. Throughout the rest of the chapter the conversation between Mr and Mrs Bennet adds humour and amusement.
The character of Mrs Bennet is depicted incredibly well in the opening chapter. Jane Austen has made her very emotional and dramatic, always overplaying everything and making a scene out of it, take this extract for example:
``They have none of them much to recommend them,'' replied he; ``they are all silly and ignorant like other girls; but Lizzy has something more of quickness than her sisters.''
``Mr. Bennet, how can you abuse your own children in such way? You take delight in vexing me. You have no compassion on my poor nerves.'’
The reply that Jane Austen has given from Mrs Bennet is extremely spectacular and over acted. Austen has
Hope and Homes for Children
Head Office
East Clyffe, Salisbury
Wiltshire, SP3 4LZ
To Amanda Braithwaite, Cosmos Advertising Agency
Thank you very much for the rough-cut promotional video, which I received yesterday. I was very impressed with the effort you have put in but there are a few things that I think need to be changed in order to improve the affect that the advert has on the viewer
The initial impact is very effective and makes the audience want to carry on watching. The machine gun at the beginning is the main cause of this as it is so shocking and dramatic, especially with the darkness and the pictures of the children. The only thing that could be changed is the length and amount of gun firing as I think that just one gunshot would be more effective. I like the way the first few scenes are in black, grey and white as this shows the dullness and almost the pain that these children are going through. The cot scene (with the baby screaming a rocking from side to side) is very touching and affects you immediately, definitely a good choice for the first few scenes.
The overall impact of the advert is very touching but it does not contain enough information about what the charity does, what you can do to help and how to get in touch. What you could do is add some scenes showing our employees at work in the different communities so people get more of a feel as to what we are actually doing. Also you could include our contact details and how to help, maybe by saying something about donations or fundraising etc. I feel that if these changes are not made then the advert will not succeed its aims of informing and raising money.
The final impact is not quite as successful as I was hoping. I like the logo being placed on the last shot, as this is an indication of who we are but a bit more information i.e. telephone number etc. would help. The final shots are very good especially the women with the two children sitting on a swing but I think that the final shots should be images of our charity at work to provide more of an impact.
I am very happy with the structure of the advert as it works really well. I love the way that colour is used to portray sadness at the beginning, which fades to happiness at the end; it looks really good! In a way the advert is telling a faint story about how Hope and Homes for Children can restore children’s life. The story is not about anyone in particular, more children in general. I think this ‘story’ is perfect as it gets the point across and helps the whole advert to flow.
The characters used in the advert are a really good choice especially the way you have used the images of the children. The ones you have picked are really good and show the pain and suffering they are going through. I like the use of the founders, Mark Cook and his wife, and the way they speak about the charity. It puts a different edge on the advert and makes it seem a lot more personal but I feel that there should be more of an input from other workers at the charity especially the young workers, as this will make the advert seem fresher and give it more life.
The language the advert uses is very simple and striking. I am very impressed with the first few lines of the advert ‘When the camera’s leave…’ etc. as it shows that we, as a charity, are all ways there to look after the children. I feel though, to create more of an impact, that the advert should maybe have more persuasive language to entice the audience and make them want to give money to support us. The pictures sort of do this but words along with the pictures would work even better. The words that the founders say are very well written. The bit that really strikes out is this: ‘Our aim here at Hope and Homes for children is to create a world in which every child is loved’ as it sums up to the audience what we really are all about.
As far as the shots go I think there are far too many. You could cut out a quarter and it would still be as effective. The editing between the shots is very well done though and looks very effective. The shots you have chosen are good but they are all quite similar and, like I said before, a few could be cut out and a few maybe even replaced with different ones.
Prestiontational devices colour music
Duration
Place
Target audience
Any other points
Improvement conclusion etc
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To Amanda Braithwaite, Cosmos Advertising Agency
Thank you very much for the rough-cut promotional video, which I received yesterday. I was very impressed with the effort you have put in but there are a few things that I think need to be changed.
The initial impact is very effective and makes the audience want to carry on watching. The machine gun at the beginning is the main cause of this as it is so shocking and dramatic, especially with the darkness and the pictures of the children. The only thing that could be changed is the length and amount of gun firing as I think that just one gun shot would be more effective. I like the way the first few scenes are in black, grey and white as this shows the dullness and almost the pain that these children are going through. The cot scene (with the baby screaming a rocking from side to side) is very touching and affects you immediately, definitely a good choice for the first few scenes.
The overall impact of the advert is very touching but it does not contain enough information about what the charity does, what you can do to help and how to get in touch. What you could do is add some scenes showing our employees at work in the different communities so people get more of a feel as to what we are actually doing. Also you could include our contact details and how to help, maybe by saying something about donations or fundraising etc. I feel that if these changes are not made then the advert will not succeed its aims of informing and raising money.
Hey
Any author would want the opening chapter of their book to make a good impression on their readers and to encourage them to read on. The first line of a book must be additionally thought about very carefully. In this essay I will be studying the way Jane Austen opens ‘Pride and Prejudice’, the language that is used and the concept that it gives the reader.
The opening line of the book is one of the most famous in the world. ‘IT is a truth universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a good fortune must be in want of a wife’. It is well-known because it more or less sums up the whole essence of the book.
Jane Austen has been very clever with this first line. It shows immediately that the book is going to contain some humour as Austen is almost making fun of the tradition that was around at that time. The way she accentuates the phrase with the fact that it is ‘universally acknowledged’ (i.e. it is known all around the world) when really it isn’t adds humour also.
A lot of the humour contained in the first chapter is thanks to the introduction of the characters Mr and Mrs Bennet. Jane Austen introduces the characters with a lot of realism, the fact that they are just talking together in their home as they usually would gives the impression that the characters are very comfortable with the position that they are currently in. Mr Bennet is a very sharp character however his wife that Austen has created is very much the opposite. Mr Bennet’s sharpness adds to the humour dramatically and Austin uses wit to brighten up the first chapter. For example:
‘ “Do not you want to know who has taken it?” cried his wife impatiently,
“You want to tell me and I have no objection to hearing it!” ’
Austen has given Mr Bennet a very entertaining reply to his wife’s demand. Instead of just writing “yes”, she manages to make a whole joke out of the situation and makes Mr Bennet seem very open by speaking his mind. Throughout the rest of the chapter the conversation between Mr and Mrs Bennet adds humour and amusement.
The character of Mrs Bennet is depicted incredibly well in the opening chapter. Jane Austen has made her very emotional and dramatic, always overplaying everything and making a scene out of it, take this extract for example:
``They have none of them much to recommend them,'' replied he; ``they are all silly and ignorant like other girls; but Lizzy has something more of quickness than her sisters.''
``Mr. Bennet, how can you abuse your own children in such way? You take delight in vexing me. You have no compassion on my poor nerves.'’
The reply that Jane Austen has given from Mrs Bennet is extremely spectacular and over acted. Austen has
Head Office
East Clyffe, Salisbury
Wiltshire, SP3 4LZ
To Amanda Braithwaite, Cosmos Advertising Agency
Thank you very much for the rough-cut promotional video, which I received yesterday. I was very impressed with the effort you have put in but there are a few things that I think need to be changed in order to improve the affect that the advert has on the viewer
The initial impact is very effective and makes the audience want to carry on watching. The machine gun at the beginning is the main cause of this as it is so shocking and dramatic, especially with the darkness and the pictures of the children. The only thing that could be changed is the length and amount of gun firing as I think that just one gunshot would be more effective. I like the way the first few scenes are in black, grey and white as this shows the dullness and almost the pain that these children are going through. The cot scene (with the baby screaming a rocking from side to side) is very touching and affects you immediately, definitely a good choice for the first few scenes.
The overall impact of the advert is very touching but it does not contain enough information about what the charity does, what you can do to help and how to get in touch. What you could do is add some scenes showing our employees at work in the different communities so people get more of a feel as to what we are actually doing. Also you could include our contact details and how to help, maybe by saying something about donations or fundraising etc. I feel that if these changes are not made then the advert will not succeed its aims of informing and raising money.
The final impact is not quite as successful as I was hoping. I like the logo being placed on the last shot, as this is an indication of who we are but a bit more information i.e. telephone number etc. would help. The final shots are very good especially the women with the two children sitting on a swing but I think that the final shots should be images of our charity at work to provide more of an impact.
I am very happy with the structure of the advert as it works really well. I love the way that colour is used to portray sadness at the beginning, which fades to happiness at the end; it looks really good! In a way the advert is telling a faint story about how Hope and Homes for Children can restore children’s life. The story is not about anyone in particular, more children in general. I think this ‘story’ is perfect as it gets the point across and helps the whole advert to flow.
The characters used in the advert are a really good choice especially the way you have used the images of the children. The ones you have picked are really good and show the pain and suffering they are going through. I like the use of the founders, Mark Cook and his wife, and the way they speak about the charity. It puts a different edge on the advert and makes it seem a lot more personal but I feel that there should be more of an input from other workers at the charity especially the young workers, as this will make the advert seem fresher and give it more life.
The language the advert uses is very simple and striking. I am very impressed with the first few lines of the advert ‘When the camera’s leave…’ etc. as it shows that we, as a charity, are all ways there to look after the children. I feel though, to create more of an impact, that the advert should maybe have more persuasive language to entice the audience and make them want to give money to support us. The pictures sort of do this but words along with the pictures would work even better. The words that the founders say are very well written. The bit that really strikes out is this: ‘Our aim here at Hope and Homes for children is to create a world in which every child is loved’ as it sums up to the audience what we really are all about.
As far as the shots go I think there are far too many. You could cut out a quarter and it would still be as effective. The editing between the shots is very well done though and looks very effective. The shots you have chosen are good but they are all quite similar and, like I said before, a few could be cut out and a few maybe even replaced with different ones.
Prestiontational devices colour music
Duration
Place
Target audience
Any other points
Improvement conclusion etc
--
the lush fairy: grants all your lushie wishes with her magic
To Amanda Braithwaite, Cosmos Advertising Agency
Thank you very much for the rough-cut promotional video, which I received yesterday. I was very impressed with the effort you have put in but there are a few things that I think need to be changed.
The initial impact is very effective and makes the audience want to carry on watching. The machine gun at the beginning is the main cause of this as it is so shocking and dramatic, especially with the darkness and the pictures of the children. The only thing that could be changed is the length and amount of gun firing as I think that just one gun shot would be more effective. I like the way the first few scenes are in black, grey and white as this shows the dullness and almost the pain that these children are going through. The cot scene (with the baby screaming a rocking from side to side) is very touching and affects you immediately, definitely a good choice for the first few scenes.
The overall impact of the advert is very touching but it does not contain enough information about what the charity does, what you can do to help and how to get in touch. What you could do is add some scenes showing our employees at work in the different communities so people get more of a feel as to what we are actually doing. Also you could include our contact details and how to help, maybe by saying something about donations or fundraising etc. I feel that if these changes are not made then the advert will not succeed its aims of informing and raising money.
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